tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6644918126688721788.post8333940145573717431..comments2024-03-28T07:13:10.797+00:00Comments on TONE DEAF: You wanna know why? Here's whyRoderick Robinsonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16828395545197001637noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6644918126688721788.post-14518141087640738892015-08-18T07:47:16.668+01:002015-08-18T07:47:16.668+01:00All: Heroic efforts the lot of you. Not all manage...All: Heroic efforts the lot of you. Not all managed the correct syllable count but who's counting (Well I was that's who.) What I didn't attempt to define was the scansion (ie, where the beat or emphasis lies) since it's complicated to explain and I'm never sure of the exact vocabulary.<br /><br />It would be invidious to choose any of your works to illustrate a scansion error so let me pick one of my own:<br /><br />In the line "Realised life's unfair" the word "realised" just about squeaks in but only by shifting the beat from the second syllable to the third. What this means is that prior to that word the rhythm would come naturally to someone reading the limerick aloud for the first time, but he/she would have to stop and rehearse "realised" to make it fit.<br /><br />There's another slightly dodgy moment with "Discard". If this were changed to "I'm opting for truth not for lies" (clumsier, tautological) there would be no rhythmic problem.<br /><br />MikeM gets the scansion right but in doing so demonstrates why versifiers find words like "o'er" essential.<br /><br />Lucy accords herself a rhythmic treat (ie, an acknowledged rhythmic error forgiven because of its wittiness) with the Methuselah line.<br /><br />My compliments on your collective bravery.Roderick Robinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16828395545197001637noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6644918126688721788.post-55778700626621067252015-08-18T07:28:59.145+01:002015-08-18T07:28:59.145+01:00To judge from his books and his blog
You'd ass...To judge from his books and his blog<br />You'd assume he was merely a sprog,<br />Who'd have thought that this feller<br />Quite outstrips Methuselah<br />Or some old Dane found in a peat bog?<br /><br />(Alternative first line, 'looks on his blog', but I can't be seen to be too nice to you can I?)Lucyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09764296105901909328noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6644918126688721788.post-1187192855541800122015-08-18T03:04:27.370+01:002015-08-18T03:04:27.370+01:00A man o'er a keyboard does rage
With stories o...A man o'er a keyboard does rage<br />With stories of advancing age<br />But there in his fingers<br />We see that youth lingers<br />He's going on page after page<br /> mikeMnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6644918126688721788.post-26416512240426338862015-08-18T02:47:15.151+01:002015-08-18T02:47:15.151+01:00To say that I like and I like
is not quite the rig...To say that I like and I like<br />is not quite the right note to strike<br />but since this is a test<br />and I won't be the best<br />I'll repeat it as much as I likeNatalie d'Arbeloffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07757081405040926647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6644918126688721788.post-49797542560296763032015-08-18T01:44:30.034+01:002015-08-18T01:44:30.034+01:00Rouchswalwe shan't lose the penchant
over and ...Rouchswalwe shan't lose the penchant<br />over and over she's mentioned<br />the desire to brew<br />tasteless malts to eshew<br />for the love of ales most sentient<br /><br />Prost!Rouchswalwehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01393987883437907945noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6644918126688721788.post-72644772170115231242015-08-17T13:30:24.244+01:002015-08-17T13:30:24.244+01:00Nothing easy for me but I need a treat.
As he see...Nothing easy for me but I need a treat.<br /><br />As he sees himself as an ass<br />and is about to run out of gas<br />let us applaud his life<br />his words and his good wife<br />and let us burry blogger strife and knife<br /><br />A good way to start my day. Having fun. <br />Ellenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14965850008354379369noreply@blogger.com